[heyyo]

I am new to poetry so i need all the help i can get from you guys, i would appreciate if you could tell me how i can improve this, maybe i need to use a better phrase of words or i have grammar errors....that type of thing...

thanks

My poem it's called "Water"

Soul capitulates guidance
Martyrdom quenches therein.

Expansion deluges in vein
Innovation barrages our loin
Senses mingle with the wind

Tongues entangle the message
Water strangles the passage

Soul capitulates guidance
Martyrdom quenches therein