[joglynne]

OK here's my tuppennys' worth. I like the first paragraph and even if she shows it to anyone you just come over as a nice guy. I wouldn't use the last two paragraphs though as they are a bit over the top at this stage and mentioning staying friends if she doesn't want to go out with you just comes over defeatist.

Just add something like..

"I enjoy going out for a meal (pictures/whatever) and wondered if you would like to come with me."

Give her your phone number and ask her to ring you with her answer.